错误：Please will write to me soon这个句子有错误：无主语，可以这么改：加一个主语You

或去掉will

丰富：①第一句：改为I am a boy whose name is Zhang Hong.

②I am interested in enjoying English music.可以改为：I am very pleased when I listen to English music.

③I have a good time traveling with my parents and my friends.改为：I am happy that I have a good time traveling with my parents and my friends